Payton-T

The story is about about a boy whos parents have died and lives with his uncle that resents him.The uncle said "today i will get rid of this boy",so the uncle took the boy on a hunting trip and they go to the north where they are not supposed to.When they got there the uncltraped him in a cave.The boy sing a song and all the animals come and is adopted by bears.Next,one day as they were walking through the woods and a hunter was after them.Finally,the hunter caught up with him and the boy stood up and stopped him and it was uncle that apologized for what he did and wanted to be family with the bears and became family again.

Panic Bird Poem ‍‍‍‍‍‍The speaker feels terrified about panic.He is being attaked by a bird that is avulture. ‍‍‍‍

jan.25 by:payton thomas‍‍ Lecia,because she kept all the children together and didn't even think about herself all she ever thought about was the chidrens safety.She took care of Maggie and her feet because she was about to lose them so she put them in snow and and numb her feet and other stuff to her feet that was helpful. She also kept all of them together,so without her they would have seperated and died alone like lecia told them about what her Grandfather told her "stick together".Next,Lecia tried to preserve the food that the children had but did not work out so well.Also, Lecia said that "you can never risk getting seperated" so she tied up the children in a line tieing thier clothes together.Finally,Lecia even thought that this was her own faut because if she married Dale the children would be safe at home and she would be with Dale, safe and she wouldn't be in this situation right now.So i would give Lecia caring as her charachter trait.

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I __deeply resent__ our city council’s granting permission for the development of fifty condominiums along Canyon Drive. The plain truth is, __the plan stinks__! Most residents of Canyon Drive are people like me who moved here years ago. We were attracted by the peace of the location. Now, for __no good reason__, we __have been betrayed__ by our elected officials. We face the __nightmare__ of listening to the __racket of construction work around the clock__ and of seeing our lovely neighborhood turned into heaven knows what. The prospect __makes me sick__. It is __maddening__ that the city council, in one __careless decision__, can __destroy__ the lifestyles that we have worked so hard to achieve. I urge all members of this community to sign a petition forcing the city council to reverse their decision. Failing that, we should __vote the bums out of office__!


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The speaker’s/author’s attitude about the city council’s decision on development was //frustrated, angry, disgruntled, aggravated// //Dear council, i would like you to reconsider our city council's granting permission for the development of fifty condinminiums along Canyon Drive.The plain truth is, the plan isn't very smart. Most resiedents of Canyon Drive moved here because of the location. Now, for some reason we didn't pick very trustworthy officals. We face a distracting sound listening to the noisy construction. The prospect makes me uncomfortable. It is concerning that the city concil made a careless decision With all do respect ithink we should vote for better officials.// //REVISED BCR: The author makes Hugh and his mother seem like real people. Because most parents tell their kids what to do but kids sometimes procrascinate what they are told to do. For example in the story Hugh's mom said "Hugh come on in now" but Hugh says "not right now mama". Also, Hugh's mom kinda teased him a little calling him "Mr.Coastwatcher". Next, Hugh's mom told Hugh To go wash that sand off right now and she meant what she meant. I can infer that when a mom can be bossy but she doesn't mean to be mean children just have to obey.// //Payton// //If i were Maibon i would have wished for a billion dollars. Because i could buy anything so i would have no threadbares for clothes. Also, wouldn't be in a plight because i would hire bodyguards and the would not retort me.// //Choose one of the tricksters in "Doc Rabbit, Bruh Fox, and Tarbaby"// //Doc Rabbbit is the trickster of this story. The author uses humor on that character. For example Doc Rabbit says "whoooo-hooo-hoo"nd hollerd it and that scared Bruh Fox to death. Next, Doc Rabbit says "i'm agone use my head" and you think he is saying that he will use his brain to get out of Tarbaby, but insteads he headbutts him. Finally, Doc Rabbit says to Bruh Fox "Do burn me it is my pleasure to have my coat burned" insteaad trick Bruh Fox into throwing him into briars where he lives. 4-11-12// ||